The final draft of the essay

 

                  The educational system in egypt consists of primary,preparatory,secandry and high educational systems.Educational system is a part of our lives because it affectes on every thing we learn in our life,but it needs some modifications to be the perfect system.
                   We face some problems in our educational system in egypt .Most of the young people here in egypt did not have the chance to practise any thing or learn any thing because we used to go to school and  learn some materials that are impractical. The other problem is that there is not co-operation in our educational system.Our educational system depends on conversation not understanding and this is the most foremost problem we have in our educational system in egypt because it delets our capicity of thinking and creating in education.
                       Our educational system needs to be changed in order to improve it and encourage the students to create.The educational system should have co-operation rather than competition.The educational system should be interesting to make the students loving the materials.Our educational system should respect the minds ,talents and abilities of students and prepare them for life in a changing world.
                        Our educational system in egypt is an important part in our lives.It needs to be changed in order to satisfy the needs of the students and take into account the creativity of the students.

The educational system in Egypt-the first draft

                  The educational system in egypt consists of primary,preparatory,secandry and high educational systems.Educational system is a part of our lives because it affectes on every thing we learn in our life,but it needs some modifications to be the perfect system.
                   We face some problems in our educational system in egypt .Most of the young people here in egypt did not have the chance to practise any thing or learn any thing because we used to go to school and  learn some materials that are impractical. The other problem is that there is not co-operation in our educational system.Our educational system depends on conversation not understanding and this is the most foremost problem we have in our educational system in egypt because it delets our capicity of thinking and creating in education.
                       Our educational system needs to be changed in order to improve it and encourage the students to create.The educational system should have co-operation rather than competition.The educational system should be interesting to make the students loving the materials.Our educational system should respect the minds ,talents and abilities of students and prepare them for life in a changing world.
                        Our educational system in egypt is an important part in our lives.It needs to be changed in order to satisfy the needs of the students and take into account the creativity of the students.

The outline of the essay

*The educational system in Egypt.

*The problems that we have in our educational system in Egypt.

*The solutions for improving our educational system in Egypt.

The first draft of the essay

 

                   Internet is an international network that connects many thousands of networks and millions of computers across the world.It is considered to be a double-edged weapon because it has many advantages and disadvantages.
                    People with the use of the internet say that it enable us to communicate with different people who are sitting in the other part of the world.The foremost target of internet is gathering information.There is a huge amount of information  available on the internet about every subject known to man,so students are among the top users who surf the internet for research.Many people prefer to surf the internet for entertainment,as there are numerous games that may be download from the internet for free.      
                   People against the use of the internet do not prefer to use the internet for many reasons.Many people describe the internet as a waste of time,especially parents.Parents prevent their children to use it because children can often stumble upon or seek out inappropriate websites when using the interent at home ,which can be dangerous.Many people do not prefer to use the internet because of the theft of personal information such as name,address and credit card number.Some information in the internet may be incorrect or not authentics.Using the internet for long peroids of time can isolate people from family and friends.
                     Finally , i think that internet is a useful technology which we can use it to help us in our life,but we should be aware of the disadvantages of the internet.

The final draft of the essay

                   Internet is an international network that connects many thousands of networks and millions of computers across the world.It is considered to be a double-edged weapon because it has many advantages and disadvantages.
                    People with the use of the internet say that it enable us to communicate with different people who are sitting in the other part of the world.The foremost target of internet is gathering information.There is a huge amount of information  available on the internet about every subject known to man,so students are among the top users who surf the internet for research.Many people prefer to surf the internet for entertainment,as there are numerous games that may be download from the internet for free.      
                   People against the use of the internet do not prefer to use the internet for many reasons.Many people describe the internet as a waste of time,especially parents.Parents prevent their children to use it because children can often stumble upon or seek out inappropriate websites when using the interent at home ,which can be dangerous.Many people do not prefer to use the internet because of the theft of personal information such as name,address and credit card number.Some information in the internet may be incorrect or not authentics.Using the internet for long peroids of time can isolate people from family and friends.
                     Finally , i think that internet is a useful technology which we can use it to help us in our life,but we should be aware of the disadvantages of the internet.

The outline of the essay

Introduction

Internet is a global network that connects many thousands of networks and millions of computers across the world.It is used in many different fields in our society.It is considered to be a double-edged weapon because it has many advantages and disadvantages.

Body

People with the use of the internet

*Internet enables us to communicate with different people.

*We can use the internet to get information and share information .

*Many people prefer to surf the internet to entertain.

*Many services are now provided on the internet.

People against the use of the internet

*Many people describe the internet as a waste of time,espacially parents.

*Theft of personal information is a nother problem of the use of the internet.

*Using the internet for long periods of time can isolate people from family and friends.

*Some information in the internet may be incorrect or not authentic.

Conclusion

My opinion

The final draft of the essay

                                                          Air pollution
          Air is the ocean we breathe.Air suppplies us with Oxygen which is essential for our bodies to live.If air is polluted,it turns to air pollution which is actually the addition of any harmful substances to the atmosphere.There are many causes and effects of air pollution.
              Air pollution is caused by sources like factories,power plants,dry cleaners,cars,and burning of fossil fuels.All these sources release harmful fumes that pollute the air.There has been  an increase in the death rates resulting from various diseases caused by air pollution varying from breathing problem to lung cancer.Air pollution does not only affect people,but it also damages the whole ecological system in which plants and animals are harmed as well.It also prevents heat from escaping back to the space and this causes a global rise in the temperature which affects the food supply and rises the level the sea.
            There are many solutions to decrease air pollution, firstly we should eliminate the use of fossil fuels.Secondly,we should build factories and dry cleaners out side the city to avoid the harmful fumes.Thirdly, we should reduce the industrial activities in the area  that are full off people .
            Finally air pollution is a serious type of  pollution which damages all living organisim and without a clean air,we can not live healthy.